Improv 1, Week 10

This is just a start on a piece I am working on. Its the very first free writing, so it's nothing great yet.

Smokers Unite

Lips kiss the scorching
paper that fools the fools.
Never showing the dirty
poisonous cobra
that hides in the white dress.

Classmate Response 1, Week 10

This is in response to Drika's Junkyard Quote 4 of Week 10. I could see some character that is very technically saying something like this in a piece of writing. It would probably be a under breath response to a parent saying they can't go out "after dark." I think you should use this it's the beginning of a great characters development.

Reading Response 1, Week 10

This is in response to Margaret Atwood's Happy Endings. This piece was fun to read, and it made me realize how boring a straight forward happy ending can be. The beginning and end of a story are important but the middle is what hold them together, and the middle is where everything happens. As a reader i realize that if every book, poem, or short story I read had no hardship or anything of the sort the stories would be boring. When one reads your no typically looking for something like everyday life, but something with some spice, action and romance included. We want to read about pain and suffering that ends well, but no too well. A good story isn't happy dory the entire piece, but weaves in and out of happiness. This gives a good balance to every story, and also makes them more lifelike.

Calisthenic 1, Week 10

Character Development Exercise:

Orange Shirt

I think sometimes you only use the right chunk of your brain. Wearing your neon orange v-neck t shirt with khaki pants and flip flops. Folding your arms because mama didn't give you the dessert that your mouth was wet for. Stomping your way up the stairs like Godzilla through the narrow streets of Japan. I have always wondered if you actually like your own personality , or if you pretend to be someone else that's frilly and quiet. Of course, this person would be your complete opposite. Just like that orange shirt you are loud and begging to be seen. Sometimes I find myself wishing you to Never-land where the ticking alligator could run you from Goo Lagoon to Skull Island.After doing so, somehow, someway I find that I would miss you. I missed you and your boom box of a voice, even though I would never tell you that. Without you there would be no pink pajama coffee breath breaks in the cricket nights. If you were gone home would be like Treasure Island with no map to mark "X."

This was as far as I could write in class, and I didn't edit it yet or anything. Now that I read it, it seems like a free write just to get ideas down. 

Junkyard Quote 4, Week 10

"We are all children of incest."
              -My co-worker

Junkyard Quote 3, Week 10

"When life gives you grapes make raisins."
                            -Aaron (my cousin)

Junkyard Quote 2, Week 10

"Hostile Fortune" -Decameron "Cruelty of Heaven" -Decameron

Free Entry 1, Week 10

New Vocab!!!
-Jovial
-Torpor
-Macabre
 I didn't put the meanings on purpose, so now you have to look them up! (If you don't already know the meanings that is.)

Junkyard Quote 1, Week 10

"I sit here at my desk in this paper world of mine." - improved off a line in Faust

Free Entry 1, Week 9

I has fun writing my first 6 word story, so i decided to write another one.

One room. six people. one dead.

Calisthenic 1, Week 9

This is my 6 word story.

In a bag underwater, last breath.

Reading Response 1, Week 9

This week's response will be over Dionne Irving's Florida Lives. I thought this piece did a great job with character development and mirroring. It was also nice to see what inspired Irving with some of the ideas in her piece. I thought that the story did a great job of making the characters seem real. These were people I'm sure we have seen before, and could easily be imagined by the reader. It was also interesting because the more I read I began to dislike the main characters. I didn't like what they had become, which was the very thing they claimed to hate, by the end. It was a great read!

Junkyard Quote 4, Week 9

"little garden nazis"
             -Dr. Davidson

Junkyard Quote 3, Week 9

"Fun Facts About the Oil Spill"

Junkyard Quote 2, Week 9

A customer referred to being "Publix-sick" instead of homesick while she is in North Carolina.

Junkyard Quote 1, Week 9

"I'm cold." -student
"You can't be cold we are nowhere near done with class." -Professor

Classmate Response 2, Week 8

In response to April's Week 8 Imporv:

This piece really captivated me, it takes an advantage by starting with a quote that just about every person's mother has nagged at them with. This piece also brings another interesting trait about the character, and it's probably something we all do, especially when our have pretty eyes that we don't inherit, but the reasoning behind it was different. The main character has this obsession with her mother's eyes, and the fact that she does not possess them, as her brother and sister do. The imagery was rich also and very cinematic helping the reading progress like a movie or t.v. show.
I wasn't quite sure where the piece is taking place. This work could ease the reader into the location. What is around the character? What is the character doing? Set the scene.
Nice first draft!

Classmate Response 1, Week 8

This is in response to Drika's Junkyard Quote 3 for Week 8:

 "If the facts don't fit the theory, change the facts." -Albert Einstein-

I this the play on fact here. Can you really change a fact? If you can is it really a fact then? It's even cooler that Albert Einstein, a well known genius, said it. Sounds like something a really mean math professor would say. I wonder what would come from writing using this as a starting point.

Reading Response 1, Week 8

Bigfoot Stole My Wife by Ron Carlson was not only a fun read but another great inspiration. It's interesting that he takes such bizarre and unreal tabloids and turns them into these characters that seem to live and breath the very thing that is not realistic. His writing actually made me think: why do these people need to believe these odd things? Why do they believe it so much that they risk being called crazy?
There are also a lot of reasons that they could believe in alien abductions and Bigfoot stealing wives, so to see that he picked a occurrence of the characters past was a nice twist. The character believes in everything, but clearly believes in nothing. Learning about where Carlson gets his inspiration pushed me to try to find inspiration in everything. Then all there is left to do is write!

Calisthenic 1, Week 8

This my reversing work.

I was watching a new vampire show on Netflix, one where vampires actually die in sunlight, not shine. The glorified death of the vampires basked in the beauty of a baby's first steps. Fire scorching their faces while they take one last, maybe first, look at the sunset. The ash of their body waves in the wind as they disappear like the fallen leaves of autumn. Why is their death so easy?

This is just a start to the piece. Let me know what you think.