Calisthenic 1, Week 3

Avoiding Cliches.

The moon was beautifully full, and the stars shown like diamonds in the sky.

Re-do: The cursed face of the moon sits on its throne in the company of the infinite kings and queens of imploding death.

Junkyard Quote 1, Week 3

Believe it or not my calculus professor said this in class today.

Student: "Do you have any plans for Valentines Day?"
Professor: "No, I hate Valentines day. Mothers have Mother's Day. Fathers have Father's Day. Couples of course have Valentines Day. There is even a Grandparents Day and Secretaries Day. Do you know what we single people have? Palm Sunday."
All jokes aside he actually said this.

Improv 1, Week 2

I wanted to try the active voice a little more, so here it is!

Sentence: Kim was angered by her boyfriend.

Active Voice: Kim's face was red hot as she looked at the clock that held her boyfriend's life in its hands. She tapped her foot as fast as a tornado's rampage watching the door with the focus of a man deciding between the red and blue wire.

Classmate Responce 2, Week 2

This is hilarious! I didn't grow up on a farm, so seeing chicks would probably conjure up my every idea of cuteness. It's most likely because they are not animals that I see everyday.
I would never have guessed that you would do this sort of thing to a chick. As children, I guess we tend to commit mean spirited acts. I'm glad you two let them go in the end, even though you were still happy about it.
 I really liked the way that you described the terror and confusion of their faces also.

Classmate Responce 1, Week 2

 This is a response to Kay's reading analysis.
These are two of my favorite "showing not telling" examples too! When I read them I wanted to read them again just to soak in the specificity of it all. I could see every action and trait that was described about the kidnapper.
The entry about James answered a lot of the questions I had about him. It also gave me a concrete idea of what he looked like and what his personality was. From the way that she described him it was almost easy to see how she fell for him, and who she still calls him the love of her life. I can see why this stuck out most to you.

Junkyard Quote 4, Week 2

"A writer is somebody for whom writing is more difficult than it is for other people."
                                                    -Thomas Mann

Junkyard Quote 3, Week 2

"Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass."
                                                     -Anton Chekhov

 I choose to post this quote because I thought it goes well with the "showing vs telling" technique.