"We are all children of incest."
-My co-worker
Saturday, March 31, 2012
Wednesday, March 28, 2012
Free Entry 1, Week 10
New Vocab!!!
-Jovial
-Torpor
-Macabre
I didn't put the meanings on purpose, so now you have to look them up! (If you don't already know the meanings that is.)
-Jovial
-Torpor
-Macabre
I didn't put the meanings on purpose, so now you have to look them up! (If you don't already know the meanings that is.)
Junkyard Quote 1, Week 10
"I sit here at my desk in this paper world of mine."
- improved off a line in Faust
Monday, March 19, 2012
Free Entry 1, Week 9
I has fun writing my first 6 word story, so i decided to write another one.
One room. six people. one dead.
One room. six people. one dead.
Reading Response 1, Week 9
This week's response will be over Dionne Irving's Florida Lives. I thought this piece did a great job with character development and mirroring. It was also nice to see what inspired Irving with some of the ideas in her piece. I thought that the story did a great job of making the characters seem real. These were people I'm sure we have seen before, and could easily be imagined by the reader. It was also interesting because the more I read I began to dislike the main characters. I didn't like what they had become, which was the very thing they claimed to hate, by the end. It was a great read!
Thursday, March 15, 2012
Wednesday, March 14, 2012
Junkyard Quote 2, Week 9
A customer referred to being "Publix-sick" instead of homesick while she is in North Carolina.
Junkyard Quote 1, Week 9
"I'm cold." -student
"You can't be cold we are nowhere near done with class." -Professor
"You can't be cold we are nowhere near done with class." -Professor
Monday, March 12, 2012
Classmate Response 2, Week 8
In response to April's Week 8 Imporv:
This piece really captivated me, it takes an advantage by starting with a quote that just about every person's mother has nagged at them with. This piece also brings another interesting trait about the character, and it's probably something we all do, especially when our have pretty eyes that we don't inherit, but the reasoning behind it was different. The main character has this obsession with her mother's eyes, and the fact that she does not possess them, as her brother and sister do. The imagery was rich also and very cinematic helping the reading progress like a movie or t.v. show.
I wasn't quite sure where the piece is taking place. This work could ease the reader into the location. What is around the character? What is the character doing? Set the scene.
Nice first draft!
This piece really captivated me, it takes an advantage by starting with a quote that just about every person's mother has nagged at them with. This piece also brings another interesting trait about the character, and it's probably something we all do, especially when our have pretty eyes that we don't inherit, but the reasoning behind it was different. The main character has this obsession with her mother's eyes, and the fact that she does not possess them, as her brother and sister do. The imagery was rich also and very cinematic helping the reading progress like a movie or t.v. show.
I wasn't quite sure where the piece is taking place. This work could ease the reader into the location. What is around the character? What is the character doing? Set the scene.
Nice first draft!
Classmate Response 1, Week 8
This is in response to Drika's Junkyard Quote 3 for Week 8:
"If the facts don't fit the theory, change the facts." -Albert Einstein-
I this the play on fact here. Can you really change a fact? If you can is it really a fact then? It's even cooler that Albert Einstein, a well known genius, said it. Sounds like something a really mean math professor would say. I wonder what would come from writing using this as a starting point.
"If the facts don't fit the theory, change the facts." -Albert Einstein-
I this the play on fact here. Can you really change a fact? If you can is it really a fact then? It's even cooler that Albert Einstein, a well known genius, said it. Sounds like something a really mean math professor would say. I wonder what would come from writing using this as a starting point.
Reading Response 1, Week 8
Bigfoot Stole My Wife by Ron Carlson was not only a fun read but another great inspiration. It's interesting that he takes such bizarre and unreal tabloids and turns them into these characters that seem to live and breath the very thing that is not realistic. His writing actually made me think: why do these people need to believe these odd things? Why do they believe it so much that they risk being called crazy?
There are also a lot of reasons that they could believe in alien abductions and Bigfoot stealing wives, so to see that he picked a occurrence of the characters past was a nice twist. The character believes in everything, but clearly believes in nothing. Learning about where Carlson gets his inspiration pushed me to try to find inspiration in everything. Then all there is left to do is write!
There are also a lot of reasons that they could believe in alien abductions and Bigfoot stealing wives, so to see that he picked a occurrence of the characters past was a nice twist. The character believes in everything, but clearly believes in nothing. Learning about where Carlson gets his inspiration pushed me to try to find inspiration in everything. Then all there is left to do is write!
Sunday, March 11, 2012
Calisthenic 1, Week 8
This my reversing work.
I was watching a new vampire show on Netflix, one where vampires actually die in sunlight, not shine. The glorified death of the vampires basked in the beauty of a baby's first steps. Fire scorching their faces while they take one last, maybe first, look at the sunset. The ash of their body waves in the wind as they disappear like the fallen leaves of autumn. Why is their death so easy?
This is just a start to the piece. Let me know what you think.
I was watching a new vampire show on Netflix, one where vampires actually die in sunlight, not shine. The glorified death of the vampires basked in the beauty of a baby's first steps. Fire scorching their faces while they take one last, maybe first, look at the sunset. The ash of their body waves in the wind as they disappear like the fallen leaves of autumn. Why is their death so easy?
This is just a start to the piece. Let me know what you think.
Saturday, March 10, 2012
Improv 1, Week 8
Here is my improvement on my Fanta short story.
Fanta
The guys swarm me like a predator hunting its prey, twenty lions against one gazelle. "I'm here to see Coach Carter for the statistics." They all return to their lays ups and field goals, while a man around 5'7 with short spiky brown hair and a black Nike collar shirt tells me to hold on. I stand awkwardly in a corner while orange fire balls are being thrown from goal to goal. My only comfort the strawberry fanta from my newly discovered vending machine. The coach is back, as I walk to the papers a ball, with a perfectly geometric seventy degree angle of doom, shoots from the plastic wood floor to the bottom of my can, drowning me in strawberry goodness. Every jinni laughs, and suddenly I remember a similar situation the last time I explored outside the theater.
Fanta
The guys swarm me like a predator hunting its prey, twenty lions against one gazelle. "I'm here to see Coach Carter for the statistics." They all return to their lays ups and field goals, while a man around 5'7 with short spiky brown hair and a black Nike collar shirt tells me to hold on. I stand awkwardly in a corner while orange fire balls are being thrown from goal to goal. My only comfort the strawberry fanta from my newly discovered vending machine. The coach is back, as I walk to the papers a ball, with a perfectly geometric seventy degree angle of doom, shoots from the plastic wood floor to the bottom of my can, drowning me in strawberry goodness. Every jinni laughs, and suddenly I remember a similar situation the last time I explored outside the theater.
Free Entry 1, Week 8
"A believer is something, a hypocrite is half a something, and a infidel is less than something."
-The Thousand and One Nights
-The Thousand and One Nights
Wednesday, March 7, 2012
Junkyard Quote 4, Week 8
"All roads lead to Ovid."
-World Literature Professor
"Everything is connected, that the point in Ovid."
-Dr. Surgess
-World Literature Professor
"Everything is connected, that the point in Ovid."
-Dr. Surgess
Tuesday, March 6, 2012
Junkyard Quote 3, Week 8
"By the way, on "ratemyprofessor.com" I'm still waiting for my red chili pepper."
-My Calculus Professor
-My Calculus Professor
Junkyard Quote 2, Week 8
"I think that there is a conspiracy with math professors and black new balance tennis shoes."
-Me
-Me
Monday, March 5, 2012
Classmate Response 1, Week 7
This is in response to Kelsey's free entry for week 7.
This piece is very playful, literally. The references to Anastasia and Dimetri were nice a specific, especially if your someone who likes Disney. The change between each of the characters the barbie plays was a nice touch. Katherine, a fitting name for a barbie by the way, was one of the many characters of barbie and the use of the "Katherine look alikes" was a nice phrase that did a great job of explaining that the crowd was most likely filled with the exact same barbie. It might help the story if the location was stabilized. It's not clear exactly where this piece is taking place. Giving a specific description of what the lead barbie looks like might also had a bit of specificity.
This piece is very playful, literally. The references to Anastasia and Dimetri were nice a specific, especially if your someone who likes Disney. The change between each of the characters the barbie plays was a nice touch. Katherine, a fitting name for a barbie by the way, was one of the many characters of barbie and the use of the "Katherine look alikes" was a nice phrase that did a great job of explaining that the crowd was most likely filled with the exact same barbie. It might help the story if the location was stabilized. It's not clear exactly where this piece is taking place. Giving a specific description of what the lead barbie looks like might also had a bit of specificity.
Classmate 1, Week 7
This is in response to Kay's Improv for week 7.
This piece has a lot of potential. It is intriguing, the topic that is. It slowly draws the reader in with the mystery of this "Mrs. Wilson". The strength here in this draft is in its specificity, for example the "Ben and Jerry's rocky road" reference and how the smile was described as the smile "saved for grandma's sweaters at Christmas." It does a great job of adding these smirky remarks that are pretty much specific enough to create a mental picture.
There are some minor weakness the piece has two places were "smile" is the enjambment, so it sort of seems redundant. I can't wait for the next draft.
This piece has a lot of potential. It is intriguing, the topic that is. It slowly draws the reader in with the mystery of this "Mrs. Wilson". The strength here in this draft is in its specificity, for example the "Ben and Jerry's rocky road" reference and how the smile was described as the smile "saved for grandma's sweaters at Christmas." It does a great job of adding these smirky remarks that are pretty much specific enough to create a mental picture.
There are some minor weakness the piece has two places were "smile" is the enjambment, so it sort of seems redundant. I can't wait for the next draft.
Improv 1, Week 7
Book Example:
Off the coast, the water is sort of icky.
My take:
The reach of the Pacific coast pollutes the city with blue jellies, badazzled rocks with the echo of salt water waves, and sludge grass.
Off the coast, the water is sort of icky.
My take:
The reach of the Pacific coast pollutes the city with blue jellies, badazzled rocks with the echo of salt water waves, and sludge grass.
Sunday, March 4, 2012
Reading Response 1, Week 7
I'm doing this week's reading response on the workshops we did this week. After going through the pieces myself and talking about them in class, I'm getting a sense on the middle ground I should shoot for in my writing. I should be between public and private matters. When I say this I mean, I should between the world of my writing and the real world. In between these two worlds lie what I know can happen and what I don't know will happen. I shouldn't always know the twists and turns my writing will take, but I do have the choice of what words/lines to use. I also can decide when each line/word will do the most work for the advantage of my pieces.
Free Entry 1, Week 7
This is an exert from a short story I have been working on. Let me know what you think!
Fanta
All of the guys are swarming me with the look a predator gives its prey, twenty lions against one gazelle. "I'm here to see Coach Carter for the statistics." They all return to their monstrous game, while a man around 5'7 with short hair and a black Nike collar shirt tells me to hold on. I stand awkwardly in the corner while orange fireballs were being thrown left to right. My only comfort the strawberry Fanta I bought in this foreign location's vending machine. The Coach opens the door, I begin to walk towards him when a ball, with the perfectly geometric angle of doom, bounces from the plastic hardwood to the bottom of my can, drowning me in strawberry goodness. Every "sharp tooth" laughs and suddenly I remember a similar situation the last time I ventured outside the my comfort zone.
Fanta
All of the guys are swarming me with the look a predator gives its prey, twenty lions against one gazelle. "I'm here to see Coach Carter for the statistics." They all return to their monstrous game, while a man around 5'7 with short hair and a black Nike collar shirt tells me to hold on. I stand awkwardly in the corner while orange fireballs were being thrown left to right. My only comfort the strawberry Fanta I bought in this foreign location's vending machine. The Coach opens the door, I begin to walk towards him when a ball, with the perfectly geometric angle of doom, bounces from the plastic hardwood to the bottom of my can, drowning me in strawberry goodness. Every "sharp tooth" laughs and suddenly I remember a similar situation the last time I ventured outside the my comfort zone.
Thursday, March 1, 2012
Calisthenic 1, Week 7
This is what I came up with from the interrogation we did today in class.
Elgin
A village of retirees
A ghost town filled with
Houses of pukish yellow and tangerine orange.
E-town, is what the the Baileys on South Liberty Street call it, but for me
it's just Elgin.
The home of the graves for Chocolate and Winnie,
who were eaten by a slimy lizard that was lit up
like a Lite Brite.
Across the railroad there is Wasco's Corner Store
Where Lars sells gummy worms and fruit loops.
My 13th birthday filled with tangled slinkies.
Elgin
A village of retirees
A ghost town filled with
Houses of pukish yellow and tangerine orange.
E-town, is what the the Baileys on South Liberty Street call it, but for me
it's just Elgin.
The home of the graves for Chocolate and Winnie,
who were eaten by a slimy lizard that was lit up
like a Lite Brite.
Across the railroad there is Wasco's Corner Store
Where Lars sells gummy worms and fruit loops.
My 13th birthday filled with tangled slinkies.
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