In response to Beverly's The Perfect Rose.
This piece has a amount of good potential. I would suggest shying away from the things that already have their own connotations such as rose, heart, truth, and so on. These things leave their own set of meanings with the reader and it takes away from what your trying to create here. What if we took those things out and added specifics? Describe a "perfect rose." What is her truth? What do those "pointed toed heels" look like? Try describing how she looks like a ballerina by using dance lingo or actual ballet movements. There is a lot of space to put image based description. I wish you luck, and this was a nice draft.
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